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Open the pearly gates of heav'n
Release the angels bright
Cast away this desperate dark,
Illuminate the night.

Slay the beast within my soul,
That wretched creature kill
Mold and shape my broken heart,
Bend it to your will.

Seal the cracks and patch the holes,
Make the wounds a scar
Mend the flesh into the mark
That sets me far apart.

Hold me close, hide me away
From worldly lust and greed,
Help me see the simple truth
That you are all I need.

Like puppets on strings please guide my hands
Toward good instead of bad,
And set the standard I should keep
So diligence I may have.

When the day comes you'll return
I'll stand before you strong,
And worry not about my soul,
You've cleansed me from all wrong.

I'll take your hand with precious joy
My life was not in vain
For once in death I dwelt alone,
But revival I have gained.
assurance for my soul... comment please!!
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:iconharper-faraday:
Harper-Faraday Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2010
That beautiful! I feel very good to read:iconkittyglompplz:
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:iconlucia672:
Lucia672 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2010  Student General Artist
Thank you. :hug:
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:iconharper-faraday:
Harper-Faraday Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2010
Welcome!!:huggle:
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:iconshadowfeline-warrior:
ShadowFeline-Warrior Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2010
Beautiful~ ^-^
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:iconlucia672:
Lucia672 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2010  Student General Artist
Thank you :)
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:iconshadowfeline-warrior:
ShadowFeline-Warrior Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2010
You're welcome =D
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:iconlucia672:
Lucia672 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2010  Student General Artist
dude. I'm not gonna lie. that avatar as your prof. is CREEPY!!!
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ShadowFeline-Warrior Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2010
The black cat's red eye? (making sure lol)
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:iconlucia672:
Lucia672 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2010  Student General Artist
yes. I like your artwork, but the eye in your avatar... :fear:
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ShadowFeline-Warrior Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2010
That doesn't mean the owner (cat) of it is bad ;P Though I admit it can be kind of scary lol
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:iconlucia672:
Lucia672 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2010  Student General Artist
well i suppose it is apropos to the username.
I'm sure the evil eye has nothing to do with the owner's personality lol.
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LaBruyere Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2010  Student Writer
Well done.
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:iconlucia672:
Lucia672 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2010  Student General Artist
thanks :)
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dyu-ann Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
nice one
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:iconlucia672:
Lucia672 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2010  Student General Artist
thanks :)
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:iconhlnanimefreak:
hlnanimefreak Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
This is amazing!!! :D Jesus rocks!! :w00t:
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:iconlucia672:
Lucia672 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2010  Student General Artist
AMEN!!!!!!!!!!!!
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:iconhlnanimefreak:
hlnanimefreak Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
:D :D :D
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:iconchristiancosmo:
ChristianCosmo Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
This is amazing.
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:iconlucia672:
Lucia672 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2010  Student General Artist
Thank you. :)
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:iconchristiancosmo:
ChristianCosmo Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
welcome
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:iconmedreaming:
medreaming Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2010
Sometimes it seems that rhyming poetry is ignored in favor of free verse, but this one carries it out wonderfully without sounding forced or losing power.
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:iconlucia672:
Lucia672 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2010  Student General Artist
thank you :)
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:iconalmcdermid:
almcdermid Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
This is very well done, but doesn't fit the #BlueMoonBird criteria. Thanks for submitting it, however. :)
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:iconlucia672:
Lucia672 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2010  Student General Artist
kk.
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:iconnono-footballic:
nono-footballic Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2010
beautifully written
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:iconlucia672:
Lucia672 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2010  Student General Artist
thanks :)
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Elestra Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2010
The fifth stanza is somehow out of rhytm, or at least seems to be. Also, shouldn't 'towards' be written with s in the end?

I do like it. This poem has none of that annoying 'I am holier than thou' feel.
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Lucia672 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2010  Student General Artist
hmmm, it has the same metrical pattern... perhaps the stress on a word throws it off.
the "Toward" is in the traditional form.

Thanks for the input....I'll try to figure out a rewording. of stanza 5.
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metal-steffi Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
marvelous!!
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:iconlucia672:
Lucia672 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2010  Student General Artist
thank you!
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purple-whirlpool Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2010
This is awesome! Excellent rhythm, and Oh, so true! It would make a great song. :+favlove:
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:iconlucia672:
Lucia672 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2010  Student General Artist
really? hmmm. never thought of that.. :)
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BlissfulApathy Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2010
I do not think I have read something quite like this before and yes that is a good thing. :]
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:iconlucia672:
Lucia672 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2010  Student General Artist
well I'm Glad you read something new. :)
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2010  Professional Writer
Wow, that is superb poetry... :wow:
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:iconlucia672:
Lucia672 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2010  Student General Artist
thanks :)
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2010  Professional Writer
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:icondragonschest03plz::icondragonschest04plz: :iconwelcome1plz::iconwelcome2plz::iconwelcome3plz::iconwelcome4plz: :iconubernodplz:
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Lucia672 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2010  Student General Artist
:)
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EclecticQuill Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2010  Student Writer
Its a little preachy for my tastes, but its well writen, though punctuation needs checking in a couple of places. Over all though it is pretty good.
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Lucia672 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2010  Student General Artist
kk. I'll check up on the punctuation
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EclecticQuill Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2010  Student Writer
:)
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AleNB95 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2010
Precious!
Amazing!
Loooved it
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:iconlucia672:
Lucia672 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2010  Student General Artist
why thank you :)
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:iconalenb95:
AleNB95 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2010
Ur veery welcome! :heart:
may God bless yu!
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:iconlucia672:
Lucia672 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2010  Student General Artist
May God Bless you as well :)
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AleNB95 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2010
:heart:
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hope-seeker Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2010
A lovely work and also feels like something my soul is saying these days. :pray:
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:iconlucia672:
Lucia672 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2010  Student General Artist
haha, luv your avatar. Glad You felt something.
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:iconhope-seeker:
hope-seeker Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2010
Glad you do!
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